A chance?

I sat in class today when I suddenly got the idea for a new story, and I wondered if you guys would perhaps give me some feedback about what's okay, and what's not so okay? *smiles timidly*

"What're you thinking about?"
I lay on my back with my eyes closed.
"Hair dye," I said and and smiled vaguely.
"Why?" I heard shuffling and opened my eyes. Sarah was supporting herself on one elbow and squinted at me through half-lidded eyes - probably blinded by the sun.
"I'm thinking about dying my hair." I knew she would object.
"Why?" her voice seemed a little worried - just as I had expected.
"Because I'm sick of the color of it." I wanted to add the duh, but felt like it would be to do the same thing twice over.
"I think it's nice," she said, her voice soft.
"Nah, it's ugly."
"Oh." There was a long silence.
"What color?"
"What?" I asked and suddenly realized I had closed my eyes again. The sun always got me sleepy.
"What color are you dyeing your hair?"
"Light brown or black. Whatever is the cheapest." I did not bother asking her about her opinion. It was probably rude, no, it was rude, but I did not want her thinking I cared - I never had. She did not seem to need to be asked of an opinion.
"I think light brown would suit you best," her voice had passed timid now, going for inaudible. Our conversations always reached the point where I turned bored and she timid. We had just reached it. I smiled.
"I think I'll go with black."
"Oh." She lay down on her back again, I felt relieved - maybe she would stop talking.
"Have you ever noticed that clouds resemble things? Animals, people, plants, houses... There's an entire world up there, have you seen it?" she said then. I glanced over at her and saw that she was resting her hands on her stomach, looking up at the cluttered-clouded sky with a smile on her face resembling marveling.
"No," I said and closed my eyes. I felt mean, but it was Sarah so it did not matter.




I picture them laying in a field, and this is the one.

What do you think of the mood in the story?
What do you think will happen?(if you bother, doh.)
And yes, the main character is a boy. I felt the need of a change, so instead of writing as a girl, I decided to be inside the boy's mind!

If you want to I can write a short summary later :)



-Song of the day: Such Great Heights by Iron & Wine.

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